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1、Chapter 4 Style and Tone-continuednNine Ways to Make Your Writing Easier to ReadnRevise your draft in the following ways to make your writing easier to read. When you revise, remember that very little specific advice about style applies to all situations. Keep using a technique only if it improves y
2、our writing. 1. Tighten your writing.n2. Vary sentence length and sentence structure.n3. Use technical jargon sparingly; eliminate business jargon.n4.Use active verbs most of the time.n5. Use verbsnot nounsto carry the weight of your sentence. 6. Use parallel structure(平行结构)pp30-31n7.Begin most para
3、graphs with topic sentences.n8. Use specific, vivid language.n9.Put your readers in your sentences. Tighten Your Writingn Writing is wordy if the same idea could be expressed in fewer words. Unnecessary words increase typing time; they bore your reader; and they make your meaning more difficult to f
4、ollow.n Good writing is tight. Tight writing may be long because it is packed with ideas. In the above chapters, we saw that revisions to create you- You-attitude and positive emphasisn And to develop reader benefits were frequently longer than the originals because the revision added information no
5、t in the original.n You may be able to look at a draft and see immediately how to tighten it. When wordiness isnt obvious, try the following strategies for tightening your writing.n A. Eliminate words that are clear from the context or that tell the reader nothing. B. Use gerunds and infinitives to
6、make n Sentences shorter and smoother.n C. Combine sentences to eliminate unnecessary words.n D. Reword sentences to cut the number of words.n The purpose of eliminating unnecessary words is to save the readers time, not simply to see how few words you can use. You are not writing a telegramn So kee
7、p the little words which make sentences complete. n Examples :n A. Eliminate words that are clear from the context or that tell the reader nothing. Cut words that are already clear from other words in the sentence. Substitute single words for wordy phrases. n Wordy: Keep this information on file for
8、 future reference. Revised the followings:n 1. Wordy: the question of most importancen 2. Wordy: the estimate which is enclosedn 3. Wordy: There are three reasons for the success of the program.n 4. Wordy: It is the case that college graduates promote more quickly in the company Better: Keep this in
9、formation for reference.n Phrases beginning of, which,and that can often be shortened.n Wordy: the question of most importancen Better: the most important questionn Wordy: the estimate which is enclosedn Better: the enclosed estimaten Sentences beginning with There are or It is Can often be tighter.
10、 Example:n Wordy: There are three reasons for the success of the program.n Better: Three reasons explain the programs success.n Wordy: It is the case that college graduates promote more quickly in the company.n Better: College graduates promote more quickly in the company. b. Use Gerunds and Infinit
11、ives to maken sentences shorter and smoother.n A gerund is the ing form of a verb; grammatically, it is a verb used as a noun. In the sentence “Running is my favorite activity,” running is the subject of the sentence. An infinitive is the form of the verb which is preceded by “to”: to run is the inf
12、initive.n In the revision below, a gerund(purchasing) And an infinitive(to transmit) tighten the revision.n Wordy: A plant suggestion has been made where they would purchase a QWIP machine for the purpose of transmitting test reports between plants.n Better: The plant suggests purchasing a QWIP mach
13、ine to transmit test reports between plants. (Even when gerunds and infinitives do not greatly affect length,they often make sentences smoother and more conversational.) c.Reword sentences to cut the number of words.n If none of the first two methods work, reword the sentence. Think about what you m
14、ean and try saying the same thing in several different ways. Choose the tightest one.n Wordy: The reason we are recommending the computerization of this process is because it will reduce the time required to obtain data and will give us more accurate data. Better: We are recommending then Computeriz
15、ation of this process because it will save time and give us more accurate data.n Tight: Computerizing the process will give us more accurate data more quickly.n Vary sentence length and sentence structure. n Readable prose mixes sentence lengths and varies sentence structure. Cont. n Use these guide
16、lines for sentence length and structure:n Always edit sentences for tightness. Even a 17-word sentence can be wordy.n Use long sentences: to show how ideas are linked to each other; to avoid a series of short, choppy sentences; to reduce repetition. Cont.n When you use a long sentence , keep the sub
17、ject and verb close together.n Use Active Verbs.n Use active verbs most of the time.n A verb is active if the grammatical subject of the sentence does the action the verb describes. A verb is passive if the subject is acted upon. Example:n Passive: This method is recommended by me.n Passive verbs ha
18、ve at least three disadvantages:n 1. If all the information in the original sentence is retained , passive verbs make the sentence longer. Passives take more time to understand.n 2. If the agent is omitted, its not clear who is responsible for action. 3. When many passive verbs are used,n the writin
19、g can be boring and pompous.n Passive verbs are desirable in these situations:n 1. Use passives to emphasize the object receiving the action, not the agent.n Your order was shipped November 15.n (The customers order, not the shipping clerk, is important.) n 2. Use passives to provide coherence withi
20、n a Paragraph. A sentence is easier to read if “old” information comes n At the beginning of a sentence.When you have been discussing a topic, use the word again as your subject even if that requires a passive verb.n Example: When your order arrived, orange shirts were temporarily out of stock. Your
21、 order was filled on Sept. 23.n Using order as the subject of the second sentence provides a link between the two sentences, making the paragraph as a whole easier to read. Compare the followings:n1. They damaged the order during shipment.n2.The order was damaged during shipment. 3. Use passives to
22、avoid assigning blame.n Example: The order was damaged during shipment.n An active verb would require the writer to specify who damage the order.The passive here is more tactful.n If none of these cases applies, use active verbs. They make your writing more interesting and easier to read. Use strong
23、 verbs.n Put the weight of your sentence in the verb. Strong verbs make sentences more forceful and up to 25% easier to read.n Weak: The financial advantage of owning this equipment instead of leasing it is 10% after taxes.n Better: Owning this equipment rather than leasing it will save us 10% after
24、 taxes. (Cont.)n Use verbs to present the information more forcefully.n Weak: We will perform an investigation of the problem.n Better: We will investigate the problem.n Weak: Selection of a program should be based on the clients needs.n Better: Select the program that best fits the clients needs Us
25、e parallel structure.n Use topic sentences.n A good paragraph has unity; that is, it is about only one idea, or topic. The topic sentence introduces or summarizes that main idea. Grammatically, the topic sentence may be either stated or implied; that is, as long as the paragraph Is about only one to
26、pic, it does not need to have an explicit topic sentence.n Cont.n Grammatically, the topic sentence may come anywhere in the paragraph: at the beginning , middle,or end. Your writing will be easier to read, however, if you make the topic sentence explicit and put it at the beginning of the paragraph
27、.n Plan B also has economic advantages.(Prepares the reader for a discussion of Bs economic advantages.) We had several personnel changes in June.n (Prepares the reader for a list of the months terminations and hires.)n When the first sentence of a paragraph is not the topic sentence, readers who sk
28、im may miss the main point. Move the topic sentence to the beginning of the paragraph.In some cases you may need to write a topic sentence. If you cant think of a single sentence which serves as an “umbrella” to cover every sentence, the paragraph lacks unity. To solve the problem, either splitn The
29、 paragraph into two or eliminate the sentence which is off the main point.n Use specific , vivid words.n Specific, vivid word choice show that your mind is at work; they surprise your reader;they perk up your writing.Even a routine informative report can benefit from an occasional vivid image. Persu
30、asive messages need specifics to be convincing. The following sentence illustrate effective specifics:n Computers do not like the food that humans eat. So be careful that no crumbs,sauces, soups,or oils get into the machinery if youre eating nearby.n Put your readers in your sentences.n Use second-p
31、erson pronouns(you) rather than third-person(he,she,one,they) to give your writing more impact. You is both singular and plural;it can refer to a single person or to every member of your organization. Use you only when it refers to your reader.n Otherwise, youll come up with confusing sentences like
32、 the following:n Incorrect: My visit with the outside sales rep showed me that your schedule can change quickly.n Correct: My visit with the outside sales rep showed me that schedules can change quickly. Building a good style of your ownn Two basic ways to build a good business style: read widely an
33、d write a great deal. To get a sense of the informality needed for business writing, read magazine articles and the copy in newspaper and magazine ads. Read this book. Experiment with different styles, recognizing that anything thats new to you will feel strange for a while. Writing well takes pract
34、ice. Do some free-writing at least three times a weekn A week: write for 15 minutes(set a timer) without stopping to think, revise,or edit.Read what youve written out loud to another person. If youd never talk like that,try rephrasing your idea in words that are more conversational.Building a good s
35、tyle takes energy and effort,but its well worth the work. Good style can make every document you write more effective; good style will help make you the good writer so valuable to every organization. Summary of Effective Business Writingn10 Steps to Good Business Writingn1 Remember your ABCnAccurate
36、 = check facts, details and proofreadnBrief=use KISS principlenClear=use simple, easy words; write naturally and Clear=use simple, easy words; write naturallyn And moderate your enthusiasm.n 2.Be courteous and considerate(礼节周到)n 3. Use appropriate tonen Examples: (1) We can not do anything about you
37、r problem.n (2) This problem would not happened if you had connected the wires properly. Better: (1) Unfortunately we are unable to help you n On this occasion.n (2) The problem may be solved by connecting the wires as shown in the handbook.n 4. Write naturally and sincerelyn Examples: (1) I have pl
38、easure in informing youn (2) I should be grateful if you would be good enough to advise us. Better: (1) I am pleased to tell youn(2) Please let me known5. remember the KISS principlenExamples: (1) commence, utilize,nTerminate, advise, despatch, sufficient, expediten(2) in the very near futuren(3) we
39、 would like to ask you to Better: (2) soon (3) pleasen6. Use modern terminologynExamples: (1) We are in receipt of your letter dated 12 June.n(2) We have received your letter of 12 June.n(3) the above-mentioned goodsn(4) Enclosed herewith you will find Better: (1) Thank you for your letter of 12 Jun
40、e.n (2) don (3) these goodsn (4) I enclosed/ Enclosed is /Here isn 7. Include essential detailsn Examples:n (1) My flight arrives at 3.30 on Wed.n (2) Our Sales Manager will contact you soon. Better: (1) My flight BA 121 from London HeathrownShould arrive at Wuhan Airport at 16:30 on Wednesday 12 Ju
41、ne.n(2) Mr. John Matthews, our Sales Manager, will contact you soon.n8. Be consistent (保持一致性)nExamples: (1) The people attending will be John Wilson, G Turner, Mandy Harrison and Bob from Sales. Better: (1) The people attending the nextncommittee meeting will be John Wilson, Gloria Turner, Mandy Har
42、rison and Bob Turner. n9. Use active not passive voicen10. Compose CLEAR communicationsn Clear, Logical, Empathetic, Accurate and Right Summary of good style in business writingnIts less formal, businesslike, more friendly and more personal than the style usually used for term papers.nGood business writing sounds like a person talking to another person. Do Practice 3nHomework: EXERCISES FOR CHAPTER 4 n4-1,
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