英语江苏省南京市高三公开课教学课件调研测试书面表达

Writing AssessmentWriting Assessment By the end of the lesson,youll be able to 1.make a summary of a short passage；2.learn the steps of organizing your essay effectively；3.know how to assess your essay.What makes a good essay?Question for discussion Clean and clear handwriting All points included&to the pointGood beginning&endingWell organized paragraphsProper linking words No grammatical mistakesAppropriate wordsVaried sentence patterns A Good EssayStructure Opening Body Conclusion Topic sentenceSupporting sentencesConcluding sentenceSix steps to organize an essay Step 1 Read instructions Step 2 Make an outline Step 3 List key points Step 4 Link words into cohesive(连贯)sentences Step 5 Organize sentences into paragraphs Step 6 Polish up your writingStep 1 Read instructions 30;120;at least two points;no original sentences Theme:handle obstacles in life 3 paragraphs Step 2:Make an outlineP1 Summary P3 Ways to deal with personal obstacles The story tells of P2 General inspirations What inspires me I was deeply impressed byPersonally,From where I stand,Steps 3-6 Step 3:Make a list of key points of each paragraph Step 4:Combine each points into cohesive sentences Step 5:Combine sentences into a well structured paragraph Step 6:Polish up your writingParagraph 1:Make a summary Q:How to make a summary of a narrative(叙述)writing?Based on the basic elementsWho What(events)How(effects)Why(reasons)the elements involved Who What(event)How(ways/effects)Ellick,a 7 year old girl;has no handswon a hand writing competitionmade her parents proud;made people amazedWhich one is better?1.Overcoming her disability,Ellick won a handwriting competition for the disabled kids,without even using prosthetics.Her courage and determination are inspiring and impressive.2.A seven-year-old girl was born without hand.But she had a great tendency to be independent since she was a baby.Finally she won a national award for handwriting for special-need students even without prosthetics.Paragraph 2 Paragraph 2 inspirationsinspirations(2 Points at least)(2 Points at least)3 steps to follow 1)Write down the key points by asking yourself the following questions:Q1 What inspires you most?(What)Q2 Why are you inspired?(Why)Q3 How do these aspects influence our life?(How)Q1 What?positive attitude optimism;courage;bravery determination;perseverance;persistence constant effort;Q2 Why?positive attitude;constant effortIn front of obstacles,too many people choose to shrink because of fears in their heart and pessimism towards life.Although the little girl is disabled,she is brave enough to face up to the biggest obstacle in her life.Q3 How?When we are in the dark,positive attitude _.Constant effort together with positive attitude will_.serves as the light we can use to find our correct path and secure a better destinationbring us success 2)Combine all the points into cohesive(连贯连贯)sentences by using linking phrases Just for reference:What touches me most is Anyas positive attitude as well as her constant effort facing obstacles.(1)_(现实中现实中),too many people choose to shrink because of fears in their heart and pessimism towards life,(2)_the little girl,(3)_the fact that she is disabled,is brave enough to face up to the biggest obstacle in her life.(4)_her achievement shows us that when we are in the dark,positive attitude serves as the light to find our correct path and secure a better destination.(5)_,together with positive attitudes,constant efforts will bring us sure success.In realitywhiledespiteAndMeanwhile 3)Polish up your writing Try to use some advanced words and varied sentence patterns:_(让我触动最深的是)is Anyas positive attitude as well as her constant effort _（当遭遇困难时）.In reality,too many people choose to _(退缩)because of fears in their heart and pessimism towards life,while the little girl,_（倒装句：虽然她残疾了）,is brave enough to _(直面)the biggest obstacle in her life.And she shows us that when we are in the dark,_(强调句式：正是积极的态度）serves as the light for us to find our correct path and secure a better destination._（倒装句：同样重要的是）our constant effort towards our goal with the courage of never giving up,which will _(收获)sure success.让我触动最深的是What touches/inspires/enlightens me most is.What impresses/strikes me is 当遭遇困难时in front of obstacleswhen facing/encountering faced with/confronted with obstaclesmeeting with/running up against 退缩/放弃 shrink back;hold back;withdraw give up;give in;surrender;虽然她残疾了(inverted sentence)Disabled as she is 直面困难face up to/facewith courage;face bravely ,正是积极的态度充当着指引我们正确道路的光(it isthat）,it is positive attitude that serves as the light for us to find our correct path.同样重要的是(inverted sentence)Equally important is 收获成功yield/help you reap/harvest success Possible version What touches me most is Anyas positive attitude as well as her constant effort when confronted with obstacles.In reality,too many people choose to shrink because of fears in their heart and pessimism towards life,while the little girl,disabled as she is,is brave enough to face up to the biggest obstacle in her life.And she shows us that when we are in the dark,it is positive attitude that serves as the light we can use to find our correct path and secure a better destination.Equally important is our constant effort towards our goal with the courage of never giving up,which will yield sure success.Time for polishing Group work:revise a students writing belowRevised version for referenceI was deeply impressed by the story.Just like Anaya,we may face various challenges and difficulties,but it is positive attitude that will help us get through them.From the story,I learn that the attitude as well as the spirit of hard working play an equally important role in our lives.Besides,perseverance is a key quality that we all need to possess,which will help us stick to the end and finally achieve what we want.Paragraph 3 Peer work Ask your partner(1)if his/her essay includes the following two aspects:obstacles he/shes facingapproaches to handling them(2)if his/her article includes:any linking wordsany advanced vocabulary（高级词汇）any good sentence patterns（句式）Self-Assessment ASSESSMENTstructureIs the essay divided into parts?Does each part have a topic sentence?contentAre all the details stated Is everything to the point(切题切题)?LanguageDoes the writer use any linking words?Are there any mistakes?Is there any advanced vocabulary（高级词汇）（高级词汇）?Are there any good sentence patterns（句式）（句式）?Handwriting is the handwriting neat and clear?Lets improve it: