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1、英国某知名杂志审稿专家对中国学者投稿的修改意见及解释(中文解释:唐一平)1原文：A novel strengthening process was developed to improve high-temperature properties of alumina-based ceramic cores containing yttria(氧化钇). Besides, different parameters, including reinforcing agent, the number of times of vacuum impregnating, were investigated.

2、RevisedA strengthening process was developed to improve the high-temperature properties of alumina-based ceramic cores containing yttria, and different parameters, such as fortifier(强化剂), vacuum impregnating times and re-sintering temperature were investigated.(原文罗嗦,修改后紧凑些)备注：novel is another value-

3、judgment word that is inappropriate in a scientific report.Novel 是新颖,奇异之意,我们许多作者喜欢用这个词,但这个英国学者认为在科学报告中不宜用它.1. 原文And the strengthening mechanism was also revealed by using X-ray diffraction and electron spectroscopy analysis.RevisedAnd the strengthening mechanism was revealed by using X-ray diffracti

4、on and electron spectroscopy analysis.备注：And and also are both redundant.(不要同时用”and和also”)2. 原文Currently, there are two types of ceramic cores: i.e., fused silica-based and alumina-based cores, both have been used for casting hollow turbine blades. The high-temperature properties of fused silica-bas

5、ed ceramic cores are obtained by controlling the precipitated amount of cristobalite(方英石) in the range of about 816%.RevisedAt present, there are two types of ceramic cores: fused silica-based and alumina-based cores, both of which have been used for fabricating hollow turbine blades. The high-tempe

6、rature properties of fused silica-based ceramic cores are obtained by controlling the amount of precipitated cristobalite in the range of about 816%.备注：（1）i.e. is redundant. “i.e.”重复多余（2）Both 改为both of which （3）the precipitated amount of cristobalite改为 the amount of precipitated cristobalite3. 原文To

7、rapidly obtain sufficient room-temperature flexural strength at relative low sintering temperature, mineralizers are added during slip preparation to form low melting point phases, however, which may impair the high-temperature properties to some degree.RevisedTo obtain sufficient room-temperature f

8、lexural strength at relative low sintering temperature, mineralizers are added during slip preparation to form low melting point phases. These may impair the high-temperature properties to some degree.备注：（1）rapidly is redundant (since the rate of densification is not reported). 文章没有提到密实化的速度,故用”rapid

9、ly”多余.（2）. These(指矿化剂mineralizer) may impair (which 不清楚何所指?)4. 原文：High quality ceramic mould is the basis of investment-cast hollow turbine blade of aero engines. RevisedHigh quality ceramic mold is the basis of investment-cast hollow turbine blade for aero engines. 用for 意思更清楚!5. 原文：In the tradition

10、al manufacturing process of ceramic mould, assembly errors occur during the process of assembling ceramic cores to wax pattern die. RevisedIn the traditional manufacturing process of ceramic molds, assembly errors often occur in the process of assembling ceramic cores to wax-pattern die.during强调时间过程

11、,in强调事件过程. 很多人搞不清!6. 原文：Because of the injection force in the process of wax injection and the impact force caused by molten metal during casting, unconnected ceramic core may leave original position. RevisedBecause of the injection force in the process of wax making and the impact force caused by m

12、olten metal in casting process, unfixed(未固定) ceramic cores may deviate from(偏离)original position.7. 原文：Limited by the forming ability of pressure casting and the structural complexity of metal mold, ceramic core(应该用复数,因为是泛指) with crossing structure in space(含意不清) can hardly be manufactured once or i

13、ntegrally, while it can only be manufactured by assembling several simple cores together. RevisedLimited by the forming ability of injecting molding (注模成型)and the structural complexity of hard tooling(硬模具), ceramic cores with intricate structure(复杂精细结构) can hardly be manufactured integrally(一体化,整体地)

14、, while they can only be manufactured by assembling several simple cores together.8. 原文：During near net shape investment casting of hollow turbine blades, one of the main facts of causing core shift and perforation defects is the special positioning error between cores and that between core and shel

15、l. RevisedIn near net shape investment casting of hollow turbine blades, core shift(偏芯) defects often occur due to the position errors between cores and that between cores and shell, and the qualified rate of hollow turbine blades is low.(原稿中的during应改为in,另外红色部分描述不清楚!)9. 原文：With the improvement of en

16、gine comprehensive performance, internal cooling channels of hollow turbine blade are becoming more complex, and wall thickness of hollow turbine blade is becoming thinner, which becomes a new challenge for the manufacturing technology of investment casting. RevisedWith the improvement of engine com

17、prehensive performance, internal cooling channels of hollow turbine blades are becoming more complex, and the wall thickness of the blades is becoming thinner, which brings a new challenge to investment casting. 不是”变成” 挑战而是带来挑战,向提出挑战.blade泛指时用复数形式blades10. 原文：The ceramic core and shell are connected

18、 together in the forming process by using manufacturing technique of integrated ceramic core and shell, instead of the traditional manufacturing technique of assembling the ceramic core to shell, so that position accuracy between cores and that between core and shell can be ensured and the qualified

19、 rate of precision investment castings of hollow turbine blade can be increased. RevisedIf ceramic cores and shell are connected together in the forming process of integral ceramic mold, instead of traditional casting process of assembling ceramic cores into shell, the position accuracy between core

20、s and that between cores and shell will be ensured and the qualified rate will be increased. (原稿描述累赘罗嗦,表达不清晰!)11. 原文：Rapid prototyping (RP for short) technology and gelcasting technology provide technological conditions for preparation of integrated ceramic core and shell. RevisedRapid prototyping (

21、RP) technology and gelcasting process provide technical conditions for the preparation of integral ceramic molds.(凝胶注模技术不如凝胶注模工艺确切!具体的技术要用technical不能用technological, 一体化,整体式不是integrated而是integral, integrated是集成的)12. 原文：Rapid prototyping technology is similar to investment casting on manufacture of co

22、mplex parts or model. The directly application of rapid prototyping technology is replacing wax model with RP prototyping. There are various RP prototyping that can be used to replace the wax pattern investment casting, such as salt models, resin models, polystyrene models, starch models, and paper

23、models etc. So that there is no need to manufacture wax pattern die. RevisedThere are various RP parts that can be used to replace wax patterns, such as salt models, resin models, polystyrene models, starch models, and paper models etc. So that there is no need to manufacture wax-pattern dies.(原稿冗长,

24、术语译法有错,腊模的”模”指母模pattern,而不是模具mold.13. 原文：Using SL technology to prepare resin mould overcome the disadvantages of high cost and long cycle during designing and manufacturing complex molds. RevisedUtilizing SL technology to prepare resin pattern can overcome the disadvantages of high cost and long cy

25、cle in designing and manufacturing complex molds. (这里的树脂模是母模pattern而不是模具mold. During应用在时间过程中而不是事件过程.14. 原文：Gelcasting is an advanced and near-net-shape forming technology for green ceramic, following the development of slip casting and injection moulding. RevisedGelcasting is an advanced and near-ne

26、t-shape forming process, following the development of slip casting(灌浆成型) and injection molding.(注模成型)(又把technology技术 和process工艺用混了!)15. 原文：Ceramic slurry using deionized water as its solvent has good fluidity, so that it can fill up the complex mould cavity without any pressure. RevisedCeramic slurr

27、y using deionized water as solvent(原句的its多余) has good fluidity, and it can fill up the complex mold cavity without additional pressure(另外施加压力).16. 原文：The forming ability is only limited by the complex degree of the mould cavity rather than mould material, so that so(多余!) many kinds of material such

28、as wax mold, plastic mold, resin mold, metal mold, etc, can be used. RevisedThe forming ability is only limited by the complex degree of the mold cavity rather than mold material, many kinds of materials such as wax, plastics, resin, metal, etc, can be used.(原句中有一个逻辑错误,将material材料和mold模具等同,修改后的句子将mo

29、ld去掉了)17. 原文：Compared with that of injection moulding, green bodies of gelcasting have advantages of higher strength, better uniformity, lower organic content, easier to degrease, and no defects such as warpage, cracking, etc. RevisedCompared with injection molding, gelcasting green bodies have adva

30、ntages of higher strength, better uniformity, lower organic content, easiness of degreasing, and no defects such as warpage, cracking, etc. occur. (that 何所指?不清楚.技术术语中主词的定语能不用of 结构就尽量不用,溶胶注模的生坯直接译成gelcasting green body 更紧凑! 并列词组要用同样词性, easier to degrease 就和其它并列成分不协调,因为其它都是名词形式,故用easiness of注意,这正是许多人在

31、描述某个特性“容易”时往往不会表达的地方)18. 原文：The paper combines gelcasting technology with SL technology, presenting a new method of manufacturing integrated ceramic core and shell. RevisedThe paper combines gelcasting process with SL technology and presents a new method of manufacturing integral ceramic mold.( gelc

32、asting是一种具体的工艺不是泛指的技术不能用technology. integrated 是集成而integral才是一体化的,整体式的.19. 原文：The method mainly includes: (1) manufacturing resin mold of hollow turbine blade by using SL technology, (2) completing integrated ceramic core and shell by using gel-casting technology, (3) filling internal coolant channe

33、l of hollow turbine blade and die cavity so as to connecting cores and shells firmly by ceramic slurry, aiming at providing ceramic mold of high quality for hollow turbine blade. RevisedThe method mainly includes: (1) designing and manufacturing a resin pattern of hollow turbine blade using SL techn

34、ology, (2) rapidly fabricating integral ceramic mold with gelcasting process, (3) providing a high quality ceramic mold for hollow turbine blade. 描述工艺步骤时由于句子无主语,一般动词形式用非谓语动词(动名词designing),如果用原形动词就是祈使句或命令句了.completing 是完成而不是制作.原文描述罗嗦冗长不精练.20. 原文：Magnesium oxide (D50 = 2 m, mass fraction:99.99%) and y

35、ttria powers (D50 = 2 m, mass fraction:99.99%) provided by Sinopharm Chemical Reagent Co. Ltd. China were used as the mineralizers.RevisedMagnesium oxide powder and yttrium oxide powder, provided by Sinopharm Chemical Reagent Co. Ltd. China, were chosen as mineralizers. Their mass fractions were 99.

36、99% and their average particle sizes were 2 m.有两项指标(质量份量和粒度尺寸)两者都一样就放在最后一起说明,不要分别放在括号中解释).21. 原文：conclusionThe more yttria nano-particles are left in the specimens, the better high-temperature properties will be.RevisedThe more yttria nano-particles were left in the specimens, the better the high-te

37、mperature properties would be.(做试验是过去事件,用过去时)22. 原文：A new rapid casting process applying ceramic gelcasting and sereolithography has been developed to the fabrication of integral ceramic molds for complex castings.RevisedA new rapid casting process based on gelcasting and Stereolithography (SL) has

38、been developed to fabricate integral ceramic molds for complex castings.原文中to the fabrication of没有这种表达方式!23. 原文：It is shown here that the preparation of ceramic slurry, design of technical system, thermal degradation of resin prototype and integrity of ceramic mold have a significant role in the ove

39、rall success of the process.RevisedIt is shown here that preparation for ceramic slurry, design of process system, pyrolysis of resin prototype and integrity of ceramic mold play a significant role in the whole process.热解有专用词汇pyrolysis, thermal degradation 是对pyrolysis的解释,有重要作用是play a .role 而不是have a

40、 role 24. 原文：At last a hollow mold with intricate ceramic cores in it is obtained with the pattern wax removed by high pressure steam autoclave and fired.RevisedAt last, a hollow mold with intricate ceramic cores is obtained by removing the wax pattern in high pressure steam autoclave.原文中in it 多余,ob

41、tained with 没有obtained by 清楚25. 原文：New techniques involve no tooling, resulting in simpler set-up, lower overhead cost and shorter production lead times compared to the traditional fabrication method.RevisedThese new processes need not tooling, resulting in simpler set-up, shorter production lead ti

42、mes compared with traditional fabrication methods.新工艺无需工装need not 比involve no 好, overhead 是管理成本,似乎与本句意思无关, production lead times 是生产准备时间.26. 原文：The ceramic gating system is formed from the gel-ceramic body covering the prototype, it functions as gating system for molten metal.RevisedThe ceramic gati

43、ng system is formed by the gel-ceramic body covering the prototype, which functions as gating system for molten metal.formed by 比formed from 更直接27. 原文： Figure 2 Particle size distribution of fine and coarse a-Al2O3 powdersRevised Figure 2 Particle size distribution of finer and coarser a-Al2O3 powde

44、rs图示比较不同粒度沙粒,要用比较级(较粗较细)形容词28. 原文：Finally, the slurry was in-situ polymerized with the inner and outer structural features of the resin prototype copied to form the green gel-ceramic mold body.RevisedFinally, the slurry was in-situ polymerized to copy the inner and outer structural features of the r

45、esin prototype, and formed the green gel-ceramic mold body.原意是浆料产生现场聚合反应从而复制树脂原型件的精细结构特征,copied to语法错误! 29. 原文：After completely dried, it was moved into a high-temperature sintering furnace and heated to 300 with a slow heating rate and kept at 300 for 1 hour, and then sintered at 1550 for 4h by app

46、lying a heating rate of 360-420/h from 300 to the sintering temperature, cooled to room temperature in the furnace.RevisedAfter completely dried, it was moved into a high-temperature sintering furnace and heated to 300 with a slow heating rate and kept at 300 for 1 hour, and then sintered at 1550 fo

47、r 4 hours by applying a heating rate of 360-420/h, cooled to room temperature along with the furnace.随炉冷却是cool along with the furnace 而不是cool in the furnace30. 原文：The organic binder content is only approximately 4 wt.%, binder removal is neither time consuming nor critical, the binders can be remove

48、d immediately carried out in the sintering furnace under air at below 600C.RevisedThe organic binder content is only 4 wt.%, the binders can be removed immediately in the high-temperature sintering furnace in air below 600C.binder removal is neither time consuming nor critical含意不清, the binders can b

49、e removed immediately carried out in the sintering furnace under air at below 600C. 该句语法有问题,under air 没有这种说法31. 原文：But the epoxy resin is a thermoset plastic material whose coefficient of thermal expansion is one order of magnitude larger than that of gel-ceramic material, they do not melt under the

50、 influence of heat but continue to expand, which leads to generate thermal stress in the green gel-ceramic body.RevisedBut the epoxy resin is a thermoset plastic material whose coefficient of thermal expansion is one order of magnitude larger than that of the gel-ceramic material, it does not melt b

51、y heating but will continue to expand, which produces thermal stress in the green gel-ceramic body.原文中epoxy resin 是单数,不能用they, 产生produce热应力比导致lead to 描述更准确32. 原文：If the maximum stress exceeds the modulus of the rupture of the shell material, there will occur shell cracking.RevisedIf the maximum stre

52、ss exceeds the modulus of the rupture of the material, shell cracking will occur.there will occur语法错!33. 原文：Work has been performed to reduce the thermal stress by providing an internal hollow webbed architecture for the SL pattern to avoid shell cracking.RevisedWork has been performed to reduce the

53、 thermal stress by designing an internal hollow webbed architecture for the SL pattern to avoid shell cracking.设计比提供更合适34. 原文：With temperature increasing, the binders with three-dimension network structure in green gel-ceramic bodies were burn out gradually.RevisedWith temperature increasing, the bi

54、nders with three-dimension network structure in the green gel-ceramic body are burnt out gradually.过去的实验工作用过去时,burn的过去分词是burnt35. 原文：The low-strength and intricate ceramic cores are apt to sagging or cracking due to gravity, because it is impossible to provide packing materials with mechanical suppo

55、rt in the integral ceramic mold manufacturing process.RevisedThe low-strength intricate ceramic cores are inclined to sagging or cracking due to gravity, because it is impossible to provide packing materials for mechanical support in the integral ceramic mold manufacturing process.Apt to 是易于inclined

56、 to 是有倾向A man apt to promise is apt to forget. 易于许诺的人也易于忘记36. 原文：To reduce the risk of sagging or cracking, the green gel-ceramic bodies should start sintering reaction or part melting reaction at relative lower temperature.RevisedTo reduce the risk of sagging or cracking, the sintering reaction of

57、the green gel-ceramic body should begin at relative lower temperature.烧结反应应在较低温度下进行.原文有逻辑错误: green gel-ceramic bodies怎么能自己开始烧结反应呢37. 原文：It is because nano silicon dioxide particles (10-20 nm) dispersed into the green bodies that increase sintering driving force and reduce the sintering temperature.R

58、evisedIt is the nano silicon dioxide particles (10-20 nm) dispersed in the green gel-ceramic body that increase sintering driving force and reduce the sintering temperature.强调句型中不是因为二氧化硅的纳米颗粒而是就是这些颗粒增强了烧结驱动力从而较低烧结温度.所以要用it is the . that 结构38. 原文：Because the film cooling holes are directly cast, the

59、recast layer and the micro-crack during laser processing or high speed EDM machining can be avoided, the new process is more easily ensure the blade quality.RevisedBecause the film cooling holes are directly cast, the recast layer and micro-cracks during laser or high speed EDM machining can be avoi

60、ded, the blade quality can be ensured more easily by the new process.原文中的is more easily ensure语法大错!39. 原文：Many compulsory cooling measures must be taken to lower the blade surface temperature and avoid invalidation accident.Revisedmust be taken should be replaced by must be applied.应用比采取好40. 原文：A vibration (the amplitude was 13 mm, vibration frequency was 3060 Hz) was applied to make slurry fill the cavity and the internal cooling passages of blade prototype.RevisedReplace make slurry fill by fill the slurry into将浆料灌进去而不是使浆料充填进去20