【课件】2021年3月广州一模读后续写：巧克力的故事

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1、2021年年3月广州一模读后续写月广州一模读后续写 巧克力的故事巧克力的故事2021年3月广州一模读后续写 巧克力的故事1第二节读后续写（满分25分）355words阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。Ittookplaceinateachersfamily.Oneday,Benwasplayingbasketballinthelivingroomafterschool,whenheaccidentallythrewtheballatavasesittingontheshelf.Thevasedroppedtothefloorandalargepiecebrokeoff

2、.WhatmadeBenmoreupsetwasthatthevase was not a common decoration but an antique,which was handed down throughgenerationsfromthe18thcentury.Itwasalsohismothersfavouritepossession.Tocoverhisterribleaction,theterrifiedboygluedthepiecestogetherhastilyandputthevasebacktoitsplace.Asthemotherherselfdustedth

3、evaseeveryday,shenaturallynoticedthecracks(裂纹)thatevening.Tohersurprise,therepairworkwasactuallyverygood.Atdinnertime,sheaskedherboyifhebrokethevase.Fearingpunishment,thesuddenlyinspiredboysaidthataneighborscatjumpedinfromthewindowandhecouldntdriveitawaynomatterhowhardhetried.Itracedaroundthelivingr

4、oomandfinallyknockedthevaseoffitsshelf.第二节 读后续写（满分25分）355 words 阅读下面短2Hismotherwasquiteclearthathersonwaslying,forallthewindowswereclosedbeforesheleftforworkeachmorningandopenedaftershereturned.However,inthefaceofhersonsnervouseyesandthesuspiciouslooksoftheotherfamilymembers.Bensmotherremainedcalm.S

5、herealizedsheshouldntjustsimplyblameandpunishhersonforlying.Shecameupwithanotheridea.Beforegoingtobed,theboyfoundanotefromhismotherinhisroom,askinghimtogotothestudyatonce.Theboythoughthewouldnowbepunishedbut,ashehadalreadylied,hewasdeterminedtodenyeverythingtotheend,no matterhowangryhismumbecame.Int

6、hestudy,calmlybathedinthelight,hismothersfaceshowednosignofanger.Onseeinghersonpushopenthedoorandcautiouslyenter,shetookachocolateboxoutofadrawerandgavehimone.His mother was quite clear tha3ReadforcharactersReadforconflictsReadforplotReadforemotionalchangesReadfortheme123455RsforContinuationWritingR

7、ead for charactersRead for co4ReadforCharactersRead1BenMothercalmlybathedinthelight,hismothersfaceshowednosignofanger.naughtyBenwasplayingbasketballinthelivingroomafterschool,whenheaccidentallythrewtheballatavasesittingontheshelf.ashehadalreadylied,hewasdeterminedtodenyeverythingtotheend,nomatterhow

8、angryhismumbecame.thesuddenlyinspiredboysaidthataneighborscatjumpedinfromthewindowandhecouldntdriveitawaynomatterhowhardhetried.quick-mindedrebelliousBensmotherremainedcalm.Sherealizedsheshouldntjustsimplyblameandpunishhersonforlying.Shecameupwithanotheridea.calm;intelligent;patientA teacherIttookpl

9、aceinateachersfamily.Ben wouldnt admit his fault easily.Bens mother would lead him to admit his fault instead of forcing him.Read for CharactersRead1BenMot5ReadReadforConflict.However,inthefaceofhersonsnervouseyesandthesuspiciouslooksoftheotherfamilymembers.Bensmotherremainedcalm.Sherealizedsheshoul

10、dntjustsimplyblameandpunishhersonforlying.Shecameupwithanotheridea.Beforegoingtobed,theboyfoundanotefromhismotherinhisroom,askinghimtogotothestudyatonce.Theboythoughthewouldnowbepunishedbut,ashehadalreadylied,hewasdeterminedtodenyeverythingtotheend,nomatterhowangryhismumbecame.Inthestudy,calmlybathe

11、dinthelight,hismothersfaceshowednosignofanger.Onseeinghersonpushopenthedoorandcautiouslyenter,shetookachocolateboxoutofadrawerandgavehimone.Benwasdeterminednottotellthetruthwhilehismotherwantedtomakehimadmit.Theconflictwassolvedbyaboxofchocolate.2ReadRead for Conflict.Howeve6ReadforPlotReadkeysenten

12、ce:Sherealizedsheshouldntjustsimplyblameandpunishhersonforlying.shetookachocolateboxoutofadrawerandgavehimone(p1)Benbrokethevaluablevasebyaccidentandgluedit.thebeginningMaindevelopmentResolutiontheending(p2)Benliedbuthismomcouldtellhislie.Climax(p3-p4)MomaskedBentogotothestudyandBenwasdeterminedtode

13、nyeverythingtotheend.(p5)Bensmomhadatalkwithhimwithaboxofchocolates.(p6)Bensbadattitudedisappeared.3This chocolate is a reward for.With some chocolates in hand.Another chocolate is for.One more chocolate for.Read for PlotReadkey sentence:7Paragraph1:Themothersaid,Thischocolateisarewardforyourimagina

14、tion:awindow-openingcat!”Paragraph2:Nowwithsomechocolatesinhand,theboysbadattitudedisappeared.ReadReadforEmotionalChangesBensEmotionalChangesscaredscarednervousnervousBADattitudesBADattitudesembarrassedembarrassedashamedashamed4Paragraph1:ReadRead for Emotio8ReadReadforThemeorhonestyorfamilyeducatio

15、n?5whatisthemomtryingtoteachhisson?Whatistheauthortryingtotellthereader?ReadRead for Themeorhonesty or9IdentifythethemeofthestoryIttookplaceinateachersfamily.Oneday,Benwasplayingbasketball.Itwasalsohismothersfavouritepossession.Tocoverhisterribleaction,theterrifiedboy.Asthemotherherself.Fearingpunis

16、hment,thesuddenlyinspiredboysaid.Hismotherwasquiteclear.Bensmotherremainedcalm.Sherealizedsheshouldntjustsimplyblameandpunishhersonforlying.Shecameupwithanotheridea.Theboythoughthewouldnowbepunishedbut,ashehadalreadylied,hewasdeterminedtodenyeverythingtotheend,nomatterhowangryhismumbecame.Nowwithsom

17、echocolatesinhand,theboysbadattitudedisappeared.Theme-Whatistheauthortryingtosaytothereader?Theme-Whatistheauthortryingtosaytothereader?Identify the theme of the stor10Paragraph1:Themothersaid,Thischocolateisarewardforyourimagination:awindow-openingcat!”Q1:Anotherchocolateisfor.Q2:Onemorechocolatefo

18、r?Q3:WhatwereBensfeelingsandreactionstothemotherswords?Paragraph2:Nowwithsomechocolatesinhand,theboysbadattitudedisappeared.Q1:WhatdidBendoorsay?Q2:Whatdidmotherdoorsay?Q3：Howtoechothetheme?PredictionClue1:Tohersurprise,therepairworkwasactuallyverygood.Clue2:Theboysbadattitudedisappeared.设置问题驱动 Para

19、graph1:PredictionClue1:To 11Themothersaid,Thischocolateisarewardforyourimagination:awindow-openingcat!”Astonishedashewasatherrewardinsteadofharshscold,Benreluctantlyreceivedit,notdaringtofixhiseyesonhismothers.Then,themothersqueezedanotherchocolateinhishandasapraiseforhistoppingabilitytoskillfullyre

20、storethebrokenvase.Glancingatthechocolateswithhesitation,theboytimidlyraisedhisheadbeforehismother.Obviously,thetensiononhisfacefadedalittlebit.“Now,”themotherpickedoutathirdchocolateandsoftlycontinued,“thelastchocolate.Iamsosorry,mylittlesweetheart.Ishouldnthavelaidafragilevaseataninappropriateplac

21、e,especiallywhenthereisaboysoabsorbedinsports.”Nowwithsomechocolatesinhand,theboysbadattitudedisappeared.“But,Mum,I”,attemptingtomakesomethingclear,Benawkwardlyutterednothingbutsomewords.Hismothersilencedhimbygentlyputtingherfingeronhislips，gaveasoftkissonhisforeheadandwalkedoutofthestudy.Backintohi

22、sroom,Benplacedthethreechocolateswherehecouldseethemeasily.Thatnight,Bensleptthesoundestsleep.Fromthenon,thethreechocolatesrangthealarminhishearteverytimeheintendedtolie,remindinghimtobehonest.Sometimes,nopunishmentcouldalsomakeabigdifferencetoachildsgrowth.Thereisnodoubtthatthewiseteacherandmotherm

23、ixedwarmromantichumorintohercarefulandsevereeducation.利用文章线索有效衔接首尾呼应，揭示文章主题基于文章主题创写故事情节生动细节描写体现母亲春风化雨的独特教育方式AppreciationThe mother said,This chocola12续写点评：续写点评：优点：优点：1.1.人物设定、人物设定、文章整体文章整体情节较合理、冲突解决。情节较合理、冲突解决。2.2.语言生动语言生动。3.3.书写工整。书写工整。不足之处：不足之处：1.1.情感变化缺乏层次感情感变化缺乏层次感2.2.第二颗巧克力的奖励第二颗巧克力的奖励原因与情节发展不符。原因与情节发展不符。3.3.未未能点题能点题照应文章首照应文章首句进行合理的主题升华句进行合理的主题升华Assessment续写点评：Assessment13续写点评：续写点评：优点：优点：1.1.人物设定人物设定合理。合理。2 2.冲突得到解决。冲突得到解决。3.3.情感变化有层次感情感变化有层次感4.4.有效点题升华文章主题不足之处：不足之处：1.1.续写第一段情节与主线不续写第一段情节与主线不符。没有体现巧克力的作用。符。没有体现巧克力的作用。2.2.对话过多。对话过多。3.3.卷面不够整洁。卷面不够整洁。续写点评：14THANKS!THANKS!15