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1、短文习作:表达观点类 审题点拨 此试题将时下流行的话题与学生的生活连接在一起，具有很强的时效性和亲近感。对于“孩子不打不成器这一观点同学们可赞成亦可反对，只要结合详细的事例加以言之有理的阐述即可。在详细行文中，同学们可第一段引入话题并直接说明自己的观点，第二段结合事例论证观点，最后一段总结全文并再次重申自己的观点。行文中一定要确保观点明确。 As the saying goes， “Spare the rod， spoil your child. Most of parents think it is a privilege to punish child， but it is harmful

2、 to childrens health. Family education should be given rice to concern. When I was a child， I was too active to do something terrible. First of all， my mother often talked with me， but I didnt attach importance to it. Then I made the same mistake again. My father was too angry that he punished me se

3、verely. I was very sad and crying for a long time. Then I reduse talking with him and didnt eat food to show my resistance. And my parents apologized to me. Then they thought educating child need to talk more with them rather than punishing. Now I am outstanding and live happy. 这是一篇中档习作。其优点是： 1. 要点根

4、本齐全，观点明确，构造明晰。 2. 活学活用了高中阶段的一些考纲词汇，如：privilege， resistance， severely。此外，作者也恰到好处的使用了一些短语，如attach importance to， apologize to sb， be harmful to。 3. 擅长运用逻辑衔接词过渡。如：as the saying goes， first of all， then。 缺乏之处有： 1. 个别单词、短语拼写或表达有误。如Then I reduse talking with him可改为I was reluctant to talk with him。同样，shoul

5、d be given rice to concern应改为should be given proper concern。I was too active to do something terrible中too. to.表示“太而不能，应改为I was so active and naughty that I always did something terrible. 2. 个别逻辑词选用不当。first of all多用在表达观点而非陈述事情的开展的顺序上，可改成at first。then出现了三次，有重复之嫌，可换成其他递进词，如later， gradually， next等，让表达更富

6、多样性。 3. 最后一段的内容有待充实。可添加一些语句以强调父母教育方式改变给自己带来的重要影响，如Thanks to their shift of education methods and their awareness of the importance of munication， now I am outstanding and live a happy life. Most people who reach the peak of their careers are well-educated by parents. The family education is a decisi

7、ve factor for success， which can help children know the world more appropriately. As for the saying， “Spare the rod， spoil your child. I do approve of this conventional view to some degree. Strict family education is of great importance to pave the way for a childs growth and success. When it es to

8、strict family education， a distinguished musicianLang Langs story vividly stand out in my memory. His parents being very strict， he just had to practice playing the piano from day to night. Not only could he spare no time for his other hobbies， but also he couldnt get a long rest utterly. After havi

9、ng adjusted to those unbelievable harsh rules， his efforts gradually began to bear fruits. With a chance of performance captured by him， his talent is ultimately recognized. So remarkable is his work that everyone just shows great respect to him. He owes his great achievement to his parents educatio

10、n. Though it might seem to be out of place， it turned out to take effect for him. Overall， we cant ignore the importance of strict family education. There being twists and turns in life， we must let children know it. 这是一篇高档习作，属于正方观点。其优点是： 1. 此文构造明晰，首尾照应，观点明确。作者在首段陈述观点I do approve of this conventiona

11、l view to some degree.在末段又再次重申观点：we cant ignore the importance of strict family education. 2. 文章衔接过渡自然，层次清楚。恰到好处的衔接让文章逻辑更为明晰。 3. 此文非常有文采。一方面，文中使用的词汇非常丰富，另一方面，文中也运用了许多高级句式，句型构造变化多样，如文中出现了两个独立主格构造和局部倒装。 It seems that strict education is world-widely accepted， which most parents think is the best appro

12、ach to keeping their children from bad behavior. As far as Im concerned， only by taking good advantage of sincere love and wise munication can education really works well. Allowing for my interest and happiness， my mother never forced me to do things that I was not interested in， but encouraged me t

13、o engage myself in what I was fond of. It was immediately that she bought me a violin when I said I loved music. There was a time when I tended to give up playing the violin， but my mother cheered me up and told me the importance of sticking to my goal. Rather than scold me severely， she always muni

14、cated with me equally， from which I learned something I would never forget. It is love and respect that play a vitally important role in education. Seldom does punishment teach children how to behave correctly， but can hurt their hearts. So， the education of love is the permanent topic which we shou

15、ld focus more on. 这也是一篇高档习作，属于反方观点。其优点是： 1. 文章要点齐全，行文流畅，层次清楚。 2. 语言精练、准确，长短句结合，给人抑扬顿挫之美感。此外，在句式上，作者善用了一些固定句式，使文章显得“高级。 3. 作者擅长强调句和倒装句强调自己观点。如第一段的倒装句only by taking good advantage of sincere love and wise munication can education really works well. 和第二段的强调句It was immediately that she bought me a violin when I said I loved music.